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Free Spirit held by chains,
Summoned,Summoned,Summoned rains.
Ranaway,When metal broke.
Pushed down on her knees she began to choke.

Begging,Begging,Begging please,
You have no right to torture thee.
My wings have broken into shreds.
I do not need to rest my head.

Free Spirit once more held by chains,
Summoned,Summoned, Gentle rains.
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Really, really effective. One suggestion, try to cut down the size of the fourth line so it fits with the flow of the poem. It'll be hard, because that's a very important line. But overall, I really like this one.
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~BloodEcstasy Nov 19, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Fixed it. :) Thank you!
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Nice! *Faved*
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~BloodEcstasy Nov 20, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for faving it.=]
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